Last two weeks I went to Carita beach with my parents. We stayed in our villa for four days. It was very hot there and the waves were big. So we just relaxed and wasted the time in the villa. We didn’t go boating nor sailing. But still we had a great time.
Why did I go to Carita? Because actually I wanted to have an exciting experience, having a barbeque with the lovely family. But we couldn’t make it because my sisters didn’t join us. So we postponed it till next time.
We went there by jeep. It was exciting to have four hours trip to Carita by jeep. There was no traffic jam. So we were lucky and I enjoyed it. My father drove fast. He is a good driver. I want to drive as well as he does, so I promise to learn driving when I am seventeen.
‘Udang Mayonaise’ or prawn mayonnaise’, fried
I spent most of time swimming in the morning and in the afternoon. The pool is big so I swam for about two or three hours. It made me tired but I liked it very much. In the evening I did my ‘kumon’ homework or went riding with my brother. It was fun!
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Two weeks ago, I went to Carita beach with my parents. We stayed in our villa for four days. It was very hot there and the waves were big. So we just relaxed and wasted the time in the villa. We didn’t go boating nor sailing. But still we had a great time.
Why did I go to Carita? Because actually I wanted to have an exciting experience, having a barbeque with my lovely family. But we couldn’t make it because my sisters didn’t join us. So we planned to have the barbeque next time. I still got to go there.
We went there by jeep. It was exciting to have a four hour trip to Carita by jeep. There were no traffic jams. So we were lucky and I enjoyed it. My father drove fast. He is a good driver. I want to drive as well as he does, so I promise to learn driving when I am seventeen.
‘Udang Mayonaise’ or 'prawns with mayonnaise', fried tempe and instant noodles were our main menu. I always drank milk in the morning. Chocolate and plain milk are my favourites. I always woke up late during the holiday. My mommy said, it was okay.
I spent most of time swimming in the morning and in the afternoon. The pool is big so I swam for about two or three hours. It made me tired but I liked it very much. In the evening I did my ‘Kumon’ homework or went riding with my brother. It was fun!
Well done Henry. You have some small grammatical errors. I have put the corrected story here for you to read. I am pleased that you have used paragraphs.
Next time try using more adjectives to make your story more interesting. Adding some pictures makes a story more interesting too. Your score is 8/10
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